Character Profile: Jade

Jade
System: D&D 3rd Edition, Homebrew world.
Status: Deceased.
Mary Sue Test Score:
38,
36-55 points: Mary-Sue. Your character needs some work in order to be believable. But despair not; you should still be able to salvage her with a little effort. Don't give up.

29
22-29
Some definite Sue-like tendencies here. A little polishing might be in order to put original fiction and RPG characters back into the balance, especially if Kirking is involved. Fanfiction characters should probably have some work done.

About Jade
Jade's family were refugees during one on the many Ork Wars when she was still a baby. As they traveled away from the war torn areas, their caravan was attacked. Jade's father tried to defend the caravan as Jade's mother tried to escape with Jade. She managed to make it into a nearby woods, but the ork raiders were close on her heels. She hid Jade in the bushes before running deep into the woods. Drawing the orks away from her baby. The orks eventually caught up to her and killed her. Most of the others in the caravan were also killed in the raid. Including her father. The orks took what they wanted and left.

A group of monks were traveling to a pick up their monthly supplies from a nearby village when they came across the remains of the pillaged caravan. They searched for survivors but found none. During their search, one of the monks heard the crying of a baby in the woods. They went and searched the woods and found a baby hidden in the bushes. They took her back to their monastery and named her Jade after her green eyes. Even though she was a girl in cloister of male monks, they raised her as one their own.

When she became of age, she ventured out to discover the world as Monks are instructed to do. After several years they return to the Monastery to recount their experience. This is were the adventures starts. She meets up with a group other adventurers and after many non-connected stories, starts to dream of her home at the monastery. But then the Orks rise up again. They have turned their attention to the Elves. Normally the Elves can take care of themselves. They are skilled with magic as well as with bows and swords. But the orks are also using magic. Something they've never used before. They are also using strategies and tactics instead of just trying to overwhelm their enemy in brute force and superior numbers. The war wages on and it looks like the elves will be eventually defended. The group of adventurers that Jade was traveling with offer to help the elves. On the eve of the Elves last stand, the battle that will determine the fate of the elven race. Jade and her party prepare themselves for the upcoming battle. The battle was long and fierce. Their were huge casualties on both sides. Jade single handily kill many orks before she was finally overwhelmed by the orks. Jade died that day on the field of battle, but the elves won the day. They finally had turned the tide in the ork invasion. We discovered the source of the ork magic and how to defeat it. The elves would eventually drive the orks out of the Elven lands. Jade's body was returned to the monastery she grew up in and the monks made a special memorial to her for her sacrifice.

Next Character Profile will be Gunther, the character that inspired me to create this blog.